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Naamah D.

Which poem is your favorite  

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  1. 1. Which poem do you like the best?

    • "Nameless"
    • "Role-play"
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I used to write a lot of poetry, but rushed through it and most of the time they were about subjects that I have no interest in. Now that I've developed personal interest, I was able to come up with poems that actually make sense. I have two so far that I'm really happy with. Here it goes!

 

"Nameless"

I feel like a crime scene that's left in the dark

Alone until I'm found

As I decompose I become nobody

I'm sad, alone and without a name

Nobody cared enough to confess

Nobody cared enough to make me a lost and found

When they draw my picture I hope for the best

When I'm talked about on the news nobody can piece together the rest

Sooner or later they give me a name

Like I am someone's baby girl once again

While it's not my real name it'll have to do

Until my case is closed and the autopsy wishes come true

If you can tell me what "Nameless" is about, I will love you forever and ever <3

 

My next poem is about my nature as a human being.

 

"Role-Play"

I sit around and wait all day

For someone to make happy to come my way

A lifestyle wanting someone's pride

Has killed me for it has been a disappointing ride

All I do is put on a mask

Because I want to complete their every task

If they don't like what they see

I make a slave out of myself that will never be free

Tired of this role-play I am

Every move I make makes water flood the dam

Like a puppy or her back legs I beg for a treat

But every failed trick results in the feeling of defeat

If I didn't make them feel satisfied and smile

I'm done saying I'm sorry and I'm done for awhile

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i wish i could vote for both of the poems. *claps. will save this thread so i can read again and again, later.

 

Thank you very much :)

 

Writing is a huge part of my life. The only thing is I'm a huge perfectionist. "Role-play" is about being a perfectionist and trying to please other people and how it ends up backfiring. I write a novel series and my own cartoon as well. Thank you so much. <3

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I like "Nameless" more. English is not my native language so my opinion is not very valuable but still I like the rhythm more and I definitely prefer its rhymes and the lack of them in the beginning to the second one's where they are a bit too intrusive. Go on with writing, I'd like to read some more :)

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Nameless sounds like unrequited love/ being alone to me, but perhaps it's like those inkblot tests where you see what you know. Your poems are lovely. I never really thought of sharing my work online before; maybe I'll do it :P

You've inspired me :)

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